ILL612 Sustained Figure Concepts Week 5 Revision

I had to complete a revision for my Week 5 homework.  Here is the side-by-side:

ILL612 Sustained Figure Concepts Final

Hopefully my instructor will like the improvements I made to my drawing.  She gave me a B+ and told me I did a good job, BUT my value structure was off and that I made it monochromatic (even though "it works").  So, I modified the sucker for 1.5 hours until I hit gold.  I hope she feels the same.  At this point, its about pleasing my instructor.  I want my A or A-.